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I chosed a poem that considerly gives a identity of what vampires really are. It was written by Maeve104, who is no different than me or you. The name of the poem is "Wingbeats from the high balcony." This poem is mostly about vampires as endangered species, and also how they try to blend with the people, so they wouldn't get caught. I chosed this poem because I like vampires and would like to meet one if there was a chance. A vampire is a person who hides from people, so no one knows that they are vampires. They are also secretive since they are wanted for experiments in science and medicine.(www.vampirewebsite.net/index.html). In this poem, he is also described as a creature of the night, since vampires come out only during the night and sleep during the day. Same thing with the bat. He uses his fangs as a weapon to suck blood from his victims and sometimes make them immortal as he/she is.
A vampire is a creature that looks into the night and sometimes cannot be spotted quickly by a human eye. He has enhanced senses, which he uses to stalk his prey. They are not only smart and intelligent, but also fast and strong. They have double of what is called human speed. People would seemed to realize that vampires are around them, but not for long; people would see them and seconds later, they will disappear, without being seen or spotted. They will turn into bats and fly out of sight, into the night. During the day, you actually will not being to see them since they will be recharging from the night before. They would be in their coffins, sleeping, like the dead would be until they're reborn again.
People would never think of vampires as people, actually, they would be creatures that were not understood by the society. That's why most of them hide beyond reaches of humans, which are abandoned churches, empty cemeteries, rooftops and other places where they can be safe. But, there are vampires in the world who are just humans, who consider themselves as vampires who feed off human blood for nutrients. This poem also talks about a man or a woman getting bitten by a vampire and what they felt while being bitten. They experience it as cold, fearing and something strange. Vampires have no life since they are immortal, and they can be doing everything they want in their life. They fly, bite by using their fangs, and making the other people into the wings of night. Vampires can make people(normal humans) forget about what has happen to them, their own memories of a specific date.
The tone is the what the writer is trying to show through emotions or feelings. This poem contains feelings of a vampire, a creature that is always hunted by society. He is not free; he is always hunted by people who hate or fear him.
Symbolism is when the writer uses symbols or terms that would stand for something else. For example, in the poem, the writer uses the symbol bat for vampire. He does that since the vampires move freely throughout the world and couldn't be stopped. Also, a bat flies solo, just like a vampire. The writer uses the fangs, which would symbolize for eternal life. Since vampires drink blood for their victims, blood gives them more life, and also more power. Blood is like a power to them.
In the conclusion, this poem tells us many things. One thing is that vampires were not understood for hundreds of years, and were thought as monsters or dangerous creatures which had to be exterminated or killed off. Another thing is that the writer uses is a good comparason of a bat and vampires. He did that since vampires and bats move throughout this world and freely during the night. No one tells them what to do and how to live their lifes.
The website for tone- www.frostfriends.org/tone.hmtl
The website for symbolism- http://rwc.hunter.cuny.edu/reading-writing/on-line/lit-terms.html.
Paragraph 2-3, see Blog #2
06/10/16
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9 years ago
Did vampires really exist? You should explain a little more of the poet and why you chose that poem. Good start.
ReplyDeleteyou should defined the identity of a vampire. You should also use line from the poem that comfirms why vampires were consider as dangerous creatures.
ReplyDeleteyour essay wasnt written with great details but its a good start
ReplyDeleteI like what you are saying about vampires, but I would add on alittle more onto tone and symbolism. It seems that the introduction and conclusion are much more detailed than the body paragraphs. Also use spell check for errors.
ReplyDeleteyou are off to good start but you definately have room for improvment specially because this essay is too short. Also, I spotted a couple grammatical errors so editing would be in your best interest.
ReplyDeleteYou have a nice start but you really need to elaborate and give more examples of tone and symbolism in your essay. You have quite a number of spelling and grammatical errors which need to be fixed.
ReplyDeleteGood job. Just make your essay longer and seperate the paragraphs.
ReplyDeleteyou should give more examples of tone and symbolism, and some basic information about the writer.
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ReplyDeleteHi Maria, I am also a student at LaGuardia. I like that you used your imagination which is what authors want you to do and I also liked that you defined the poem line by line. Your clarification of Tone by using specific words such as emotions and feelings shows that you clearly understood the concept of Tone, as you did with Symbolism, referring it to Power. I was impressed that you can use such words to define to your Professor and readers what you really meant.
ReplyDeleteI agree. But lets ground all that in the poem! For the essay 3 expansion, be sure you keep focused on the poem itself.
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